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Opening Segment

Post by Sephira on Thu Jun 20, 2013 12:47 am

In a many Worlds, those who seek power are quick to step on those who do not. Quickly can a once peaceful place become nothing but a land of greed and fear; where those who wish to live a simple life and wasted in place of utter competence. We where once like this, but not anymore. You think you are here for just my enjoyment? You think I brought you here just for my own greed? You would serve well to realise I have no interest in your games nor in your sports but I do have interest in preventing my own world becoming just like your own.

Defy me, and you'll wish you where never born. Defy the crowd, you won't even have the chance to even "wish" you where never born because your blood will be used to bathe the lustful, your organs to feed to cannibal nature of the beings of this world and your flesh to be nothing more then an item to be used in the creation of every day items. I am not one to kid when I say the people of this world are far beyond they appear.


Another day dawns, and as the camera pan's towards the Pit, a Guard can be seen rushing towards the Main Halls.

At that very moment Izumi can be seen cleaning up the ground floor's, removing the blood of Damion MacSteele from when he was transferred back to his cell. At that very moment to Guard comings rush by, shoving Izumi over and she goes.

Guard: Move it weakling, I don't have time for your peasant dutys!

At that moment she rushes on as Izumi is left to pick himself up.

Izumi: What a Joke. I can't even do my job without some Guard pushing me around *He sighs*

Just then, a Medic can be seen making her way towards the Cells.

Izumi: I wonder what's going on... Hmm, I wonder if I could follow her and find out...

At that moment, Izumi gets up and begins following the Medic, interested to find out what is going on. At that moment she passes various Guards, who notice Izumi. Swiftly they grab him and throw him to the ground.

Guard: Cleaner scum are not permitted in this area, get lost. 

Pulling himself up, he bows to the guards.

Izumi: S-s-sorry! I'll go right away!

At that moment Izumi turns and rushes off back to his mop and bucket, eager to get away before the Guards do him harm.
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Re: Opening Segment

Post by Damion MacSteele on Thu Jun 20, 2013 1:12 am

In light of last weeks comments, I've made a few corrections to spelling and grammar. I've bolded the bits that I changed. Also, there's a lot of the use of "At that moment", I didn't want to change it too much, but one or more can be deleted or modified to make it read better. You could try using "Presently," or "Just then,".
I'm going to take my school mistress hat off now. Hope I haven't overstepped my mark here.

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In a many Worlds, those who seek power are quick to step on those who do not. Quickly can a once peaceful place become nothing but a land of greed and fear; where those who wish to live a simple life are wasted in place of utter competence. We were once like this, but not anymore. You think you are here for just my enjoyment? You think I brought you here just for my own greed? You would serve well to realise I have no interest in your games nor in your sports but I do have interest in preventing my own world becoming just like yours.

Defy me, and you'll wish you were never born. Defy the crowd, you won't even have the chance to "wish" you were never born because your blood will be used to bathe the lustful, your organs used to feed the cannibalistic nature of the beings of this world and your flesh to be nothing more then an item to be used in the creation of every day objects. I am not one to kid when I say the people of this world are far beyond what they appear to be.


Another day dawns, and as the camera pan's towards the Pit, a Guard can be seen rushing towards the Main Halls.

At that very moment Izumi can be seen cleaning up the ground floor's, removing the blood of Damion MacSteele from when he was transferred back to his cell. At that very moment to Guard comings rush by, shoving Izumi over and she goes.

Guard: Move it weakling, I don't have time for your peasant duties!

At that moment she rushes on as Izumi is left to pick himself up.

Izumi: What a Joke. I can't even do my job without some Guard pushing me around *He sighs*

Just then, a Medic can be seen making her way towards the Cells.

Izumi: I wonder what's going on... Hmm, I wonder if I could follow her and find out...

At that moment, Izumi gets up and begins following the Medic, interested to find out what is going on. At that moment she passes various Guards, who notice Izumi. Swiftly they grab him and throw him to the ground.

Guard: Cleaner scum are not permitted in this area, get lost. 

Pulling himself up, he bows to the guards.

Izumi: S-s-sorry! I'll go right away!

At that moment Izumi turns and rushes off back to his mop and bucket, eager to get away before the Guards do him harm.

The Camera then pans to the Main Hall, as the Guard can be seen rushing through the doors. Inside, Lilynette can be found alongside various Guards, looking out the window towards the City.

Guard: Your majesty! There seems to be a problem!

Lilynette quickly turns, angered at being disturbed so suddenly.

Lilynette: What is this problem that you have to disturb me with. You had better come out with this quick, before I decide to use your head as a new ornament to inspire the combatants. 

The Guard quickly goes to kneel before her.

Guard: Your majesty, their seems to be a disturbance in the Underground sector of the Pit... I think the Shadows have been disturbed by your match...

Lilynette smiles, as she turns to look back at the city.

Lilynette: Ah, yes the Shadows. Oh, how lovely they would come to greet us this day. Oh I do wonder how they will take to meeting me once again.

Lilynette turns to the Guards and nods. They soon rush off, heading in various directions. At that moment, Lilynette picks up a Red Sword from the Wall and holds it up towards her; it's sharp edges shining off the lighting in the room.

Lilynette: Time to say hello to our friends. Proceed with the Event's as planned; if need be cut it short and keep the place guarded. I will deal with this myself. 

Just then Lilynette begins walking down the Hall, sword in hand alone.
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